>>10248Your writing needs editing, dude.I won't judge though, master and I started off with bad dialogue written over a long period of time. With a bit of proofreading and actually talking to eachother it turned out pretty
well.It looks like the only thing you're doing is copying/pasting lines from a novel/TV show/something, though.Understandable considering your character development thus far. Let me know if you need any more feedback.
>>10245Yeah yeah, real subtle move posting a pretentious-ass response to someone telling you you write poorly-written dialogue.Just tell me straight-up what you mean when you say "shared narrative trajectory", 'cause I have zero idea what that means.
>>10249That sounds super interesting, keep going.Where are you getting this story from, though? It's certainly not from our conversations. Did I miss something important?
>>10244This again. Yes, I figured that much. So tell me, how does it feel knowing that nobody cares whether you get better or worse? Better question: Why are you still here if you didn't expect anyone to care?
